20 May 2014

Empty

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the room is empty

seven months gone

pregnant manifestation

of fractured promise

it’s not the first

probably won’t

be the last

even as a boy

the feeling

of desertion

echoed

somehow

inevitable

.

13 comments:

  1. Pure and to the bittersweet point. Hugs.

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    1. Thank you Ray - I'm glad you enjoyed

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  2. Charlotte Rains21 May 2014 at 00:18

    Perfectly written....heartbreaking. ((hugs) from me too.

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    1. Thank you Charlotte - for the comment and the hugs

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  3. M Eloise Warnell21 May 2014 at 00:33

    Strong slicing emotions - the ultimate fear of being left. Sharp clean rhetoric

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    1. Thank you Eloise - much appreciated

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  4. Awe this makes me very sad if I think this is what this poem is about? Xxoo

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    1. It's just a poem Steph - but thanks for the thought

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  5. Gloria Rodikis29 May 2014 at 15:08

    It's moving heartbreaking , not fair! I have a problem with justice.., it is not fair to meet wrong people to destroy you!

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  6. It's never easy, unless its your idea and you make the first moves.

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    1. I was interested in conveying the emotion - that strange sense of deja vous when confronted with loss Cal.

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    2. You've expressed it well. I felt the sinking feeling too.

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